The revised opening starts out the same way as before, with the protagonist practicing running on the track. Only now the protagonist is narrating, although the audience doesn’t know it yet. The narrator is talking about all of this athlete’s accomplishments; awards, school records, recruiting rank, scholarships to prestigious universities, etc. Then, all of a sudden, the athlete seems to go down with a gruesome injury and the flashback along with the narration ends. It now shows that the athlete is watching TV in a dark room with the light from the TV shining on his face. The camera then shows the boot on the same leg that he injured in the flashback. Now, the TV channel is the only thing being shown and seen by the audience. The TV channel is a sports station that has two hosts which are talking about the protagonist and on the side of the TV is a graphic of his accomplishments along with a picture of him. The TV hosts reveal what the injury is, the fates of the other star athletes who dealt with the same injury as the protagonist (the other athletes had to quit the sport forever because of the injury), and the odds of the protagonist returning back to his normal form. After that, the opening ends.
The biggest thing missing from this revised outline the radio station in the car ride. Farjad and I thought that the radio part was unnecessary since the the TV basically did the exact same thing later on in the opening. We also think that this outline would make the opening shorter and now it’ll probably fit into the specified timeframe, unlike the last one. Overall, I think this outline is an improvement from the last one we made up in my previous post, so I want to run with this.
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| Sorry for it being a little messy (and blurry) but the actual outline is the one that isn't crossed out. |
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